Feedback 2

• 0.2.1

  • it was important to write without changing a single word at a time

  • it was important to copy verbatim

  • I know the word “verbatim”, but it seems too difficult for non-native readers
  • I keep the original at this time. Any suggestions?

  • It is the same structure.

  • It therefore has the same structure.

  • Need “therefore”?

• 0.2.2

  • finding common patterns from multiple units of concrete information

  • How about: “multiple pieces of”
  • I used the word “pieces” in chapter 5

• 0.2.3

  • doesn’t work as expected.

  • doesn’t work as anticipated.

  • What’s the difference between “expected” and “anticipated”?

  • That sample code will not directly tell you how to achieve your goal of outputting “Hello, (line break) world!”. Obviously, it will be a code to display something different. However, if you compare this new sample code with the information you collected so far, you will find another pattern, and you can create a new hypothesis about how to implement it to achieve your goal.

  • I want to mean:

    • The sample code will not satisfy your goal directly
      • (The sample code = code which you find on the Internet)
      • (your goal = outputting “Hello, (line break) world!”)
      • The sample code is a code to display something different.
    • However, if you compare this new sample code with the information you collected so far, you will find another pattern, and you can create a new hypothesis about how to implement it to achieve your goal.
      • (This sentence looks too long, isn’t it?)

  • Moreover, how about to add a footnote as an example of “new sample code”

    • Code to output “1(line break)2(line break)3” is print "1\n2\n3"

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